These two passages describe the same event: baking a birthday cake for someone’s birthday. Each author
describes the same event differently.
First author’s passage:
Tomorrow is my mom’s birthday. I am going to surprise
her by baking a cake while she is at work. I opened her cookbook to the “Cakes” chapter
and read the recipe
for a yellow pound cake.
I found her measuring cup, mixing bowl, baking pan
, and all the other ingredients and put them on the counter
. To grease the baking pan
I melted the butter and accidentally
burned it, but I spooned it onto the pan
anyway and sprinkled it with flour. Then I had to mix a bunch of ingredients together. I did not know how to use the mixing machine
so I found a wire whisk
and mixed them; it took a lot of work and my fingers really hurt when it was done. I cracked the eggs but some pieces of the shells fell into the mix but I figured no one would notice
so I left them in there. I poured the mix into the baking pan
, smoothed it out, and set the oven temperature
After 50 minutes, I was supposed
to take it out of the oven but my best friend called and brought over her new kitten and I forgot about the cake. Then she left and I went to the kitchen and smelled something burning. It was the cake. I took it out, but since only the bottom was burned, I figured no one would notice
. I added whipped cream on top and put the finished cake into the refrigerator
with a birthday card on top. When my mom came home, she was so surprised and happy and we ate it for dessert
. It was pretty good and a little crunchy from the eggshells but my first cake was really a success
Second author’s passage:
Did you ever think of how nice a present baking a cake for someone’s birthday would be, instead of just buying it from a bakery? I can tell you exactly how to do it – just follow these steps.
Note: This recipe is fictitious; do not use it; it has not been tested.
1. You have to find a measuring cup, whisk
, baking pan
, mixing bowl and these ingredients: 3 cups flour, 1 cup milk, 1 tsp salt, 1 stick of butter, 3 cups sugar, 1 tbl vanilla
flavoring, 1 tbl yellow food coloring, 1 tbl baking powder and 6 eggs.
2. Beat the eggs and sugar together. Add the other ingredients and mix them with the whisk
. Grease the baking pan
. Pour the mixture
into the pan
, and bake for 50 minutes at 350o.
3. Add a yellow frosting mix (follow the instructions on the box) and spread
on top of the cake.
4. Add candles and be sure to sing Happy Birthday!