Drake was a newspaper boy who had a routine job of delivering newspapers. One day as he was delivering newspapers, he took a sudden turn around a sharp corner, on the main street and that too on the wrong side. A car entering that street on the right side hit him.

He rolled on the ground howling in pain and clutched his arm. An ambulance was called for and Drake was taken to the hospital.

The two men carried him on a stretcher to a bed and put him in it carefully. Soon, a nurse and a doctor came. The nurse wrote his name and address in a book. The doctor took the bandage off drakes arm, looked at it properly and put his hands on it. He said, “The arm is fractured.”

He said to the nurse, “Give him some tea to drink.”

Then he said to Drake, “Do not worry, we will do something right now. You will be alright soon!”

Drake cheered up and said, “Thank you, Doctor.”

The nurse gave him an injection to reduce his pain. She tied some bandages and applied a plaster. Drake’s arm pained him a lot and he requested the doctor to look at it. The doctor told the nurse to give him another injection. After this Drake could sleep well.

While Drake was in the hospital; many of his friends came to see him. Whenever his father and mother came to visit him, they bought some fruit, milk and books. There were several other persons suffering from different diseases in Drake’s room.

He was all right within a week and went home after saying to his roommates.

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