Summer Writing Update! - By Lumos Learning
00:00 | Yeah . Yes , it's Jalen and I'm here today | |
00:05 | with another reading video . So I know it's been | |
00:08 | a hot second since I posted anything on this channel | |
00:11 | , but I thought I would come back with just | |
00:13 | a little writing updates . Since I realized I haven't | |
00:15 | done one of these in a really long time , | |
00:17 | and I've written so much has happened . So I | |
00:20 | thought that this would be a good way to just | |
00:22 | jump back into it because I know even posted in | |
00:23 | a month . I have had a super busy July | |
00:26 | and August . Um , I don't think I've been | |
00:29 | home for the past five weekends . Moved , as | |
00:32 | you can tell , because the backgrounds different both my | |
00:35 | roommates moved to to a new place just because our | |
00:37 | old place I mean , we move for many reasons | |
00:39 | , but we lived close to our university and student | |
00:43 | housing is like the grungy ist shit ever . But | |
00:47 | you pay so much money for like the lowest quality | |
00:51 | of housing , because landlords charge you so much just | |
00:54 | to live close to the university . But now that | |
00:56 | we're all starting to graduate , there's kind of the | |
00:58 | point being close to the school . But far from | |
01:00 | everything else . So we just moved to a different | |
01:02 | place . That's way nicer , different priorities , you | |
01:05 | know . And also , our landlord was a little | |
01:07 | crazy if you saw my vlog where I talked about | |
01:10 | the time that she moved into our house without telling | |
01:14 | us . So the movie is a hectic but I'm | |
01:16 | super excited to be moved in now and also to | |
01:18 | have this really nice background that I love . I | |
01:22 | was just so happy to move into a house where | |
01:24 | the walls were like a normal colour . Because in | |
01:26 | my old house they were like my mom called the | |
01:29 | Color of the walls and my oldest baby proof . | |
01:32 | Anyways , that house served me well . It treated | |
01:34 | me well , but the tapestry is no more . | |
01:36 | The tapestry was just the background to cover up my | |
01:38 | ugly ass walls . The past two weeks , I've | |
01:41 | just been away on a bunch of like , family | |
01:43 | trips . We went on a kayaking trip and then | |
01:46 | we went to a family reunion . And so because | |
01:48 | I was away for , like , two weeks , | |
01:49 | and I went away after , like , three weeks | |
01:53 | of , like , three of the busiest weeks of | |
01:54 | my life because I was like , moving . I | |
01:56 | was in a condensed online course . I was working | |
01:58 | . I didn't have anything pre filmed . And then | |
01:59 | I went away from my camera for two weeks . | |
02:02 | And obviously you're not going to film anything when you're | |
02:05 | on an island , off the grid and in a | |
02:07 | guy . Since I've been away for so long , | |
02:09 | I've been thinking about a lot of videos that I | |
02:10 | want to make . So the last writing update posted | |
02:12 | , I think I filmed in like April , so | |
02:15 | quite a lot has happened . I'll start with my | |
02:17 | novel , Um , since it's like my primary project | |
02:20 | . So I've been working on a novel called Honey | |
02:22 | Vinegar since September of last year . I finished part | |
02:25 | one of the books . The book is split into | |
02:27 | two parts . I expect Part one will be a | |
02:29 | bit longer . My word count is about 55,000 at | |
02:32 | the moment , and I'm done part one . So | |
02:35 | that was very exciting . I don't think Part two | |
02:37 | will take me as long . I've had a very | |
02:38 | slow writing process because from September to February I was | |
02:43 | writing the book for school . I wrote a little | |
02:45 | bit , and then I edited it for months for | |
02:48 | workshop . And then I wrote a little bit and | |
02:49 | then edit it for months again for workshop . And | |
02:51 | I've just been taking a very relaxed approach with it | |
02:54 | . Um , in that I've been doing a lot | |
02:56 | of editing as I go . I have a workshop | |
02:58 | group . So we've met and we're going to meet | |
02:59 | again soon . And , um , that's just kind | |
03:01 | of to get the editing done while I'm drafting . | |
03:04 | I realized a little bit ago there was a big | |
03:08 | developmental edit that I wanted to make . And when | |
03:10 | I first had this realization , I was like , | |
03:12 | Oh , do I want to do that ? Because | |
03:15 | it was gonna be a huge edit , and I'm | |
03:16 | going to have to not just add in scenes , | |
03:18 | but I'm gonna have to take in a big change | |
03:20 | to my character's emotional state as a result of these | |
03:24 | new things that I'm going to change over a period | |
03:27 | of , like , seven chap , and so for | |
03:28 | a little bit , I was toying with it , | |
03:29 | and I was like , Do I want to do | |
03:30 | this ? Do I don't want to do this is | |
03:31 | the right choice . And then I kind of realized | |
03:33 | that if I weren't to do it . It would | |
03:35 | literally just be because of laziness . And it wouldn't | |
03:38 | be because of doing what's best for the book . | |
03:40 | And I was like , Okay , I really am | |
03:41 | I not going to make this change ? Because it's | |
03:42 | going to take what , a couple months to make | |
03:44 | the change that's done since I am done . Part | |
03:46 | one . I'm going to take a break from drafting | |
03:48 | the book for quite a while to do some big | |
03:50 | edits . I did pretty deep edits on chapters one | |
03:53 | through five , because those got workshop for school , | |
03:56 | so those chapters are quite clean . They haven't had | |
03:59 | deep , deep line edits , but they're fairly clean | |
04:01 | . But everything beyond that . So six through 14 | |
04:03 | hasn't had deep developmental edit , so I'm gonna take | |
04:06 | a while to really sort out the content , make | |
04:09 | any changes I want to make . I want to | |
04:10 | go into Part two , feeling like everything is as | |
04:13 | clean as I can make it . I think that | |
04:15 | that will just give me some peace of mind , | |
04:17 | and I'm the kind of person who gets very overwhelmed | |
04:20 | with editing . I like editing once I start doing | |
04:23 | it , but the thought of it is really overwhelming | |
04:25 | to me . And so if I get to the | |
04:27 | end of a book and I know there are tons | |
04:29 | of changes I want to make , it's so overwhelming | |
04:30 | , which is why I've been doing it as I | |
04:31 | go , and I've been quite happy with that . | |
04:33 | It's been a nice process . I've not been rushing | |
04:36 | it , so I'm gonna take some time off just | |
04:37 | to edit . And then I'm also going to then | |
04:40 | take a break from the book to finish my other | |
04:42 | novel , and my other novel is called Someone Will | |
04:44 | Save You and it's a rewrite of a Y , | |
04:47 | a novel that I wrote a couple years ago . | |
04:49 | I don't plan to take on new young adult projects | |
04:52 | , but this is a project that has been with | |
04:54 | me for years , and I'm really emotionally attached to | |
04:56 | it , and I really love it , and I | |
04:58 | really still want to publish it . And so I've | |
05:00 | been rewriting it . I started writing Someone will save | |
05:02 | you in July of last year , and it was | |
05:05 | my main project for a couple months , and then | |
05:07 | I started working on honey vinegar for school . It | |
05:09 | kind of shifted to the back burner and also because | |
05:12 | I've kind of settled with the fact that I don't | |
05:14 | really want to debut with Someone will save you . | |
05:16 | I want to debut with honey vinegar because Honey Vinegar | |
05:18 | is like very in line with the type of books | |
05:21 | that I want to write in the future , where | |
05:22 | someone will save you is less so just because it's | |
05:25 | Y . And I don't really plan on having a | |
05:27 | prolific career as a Y author . I had kind | |
05:30 | of a turbulent experience with it For a while . | |
05:32 | I was just really not liking the books , basically | |
05:35 | , for the whole writing process , honestly of this | |
05:37 | rewrite , and it was really sad . It was | |
05:39 | really upsetting me that I wasn't liking it like I | |
05:41 | would write it , and I just wouldn't be happy | |
05:42 | with any any aspect of it . And it was | |
05:45 | really unfortunate , because it's like I liked the characters | |
05:48 | . I like the plot and everything . In fact | |
05:50 | , I love the characters of the plot . This | |
05:52 | story is so dear to me , um , it's | |
05:54 | something that I've been carrying around with me for a | |
05:57 | good five years . The main character is a character | |
06:01 | I feel really close with just because she's been in | |
06:02 | my head for so long . You know , when | |
06:04 | you've had a character in your mind for so long | |
06:05 | , you just feel like you have a personal relationship | |
06:07 | with them . This book is something that in the | |
06:09 | past made me really happy I would work on it | |
06:12 | , and it just would put me in a good | |
06:13 | mindset . And it was always something that I really | |
06:16 | enjoyed working on . So it was almost just really | |
06:18 | upsetting for me that for reasons I didn't understand what | |
06:21 | they were when I was writing the rewrite , I | |
06:23 | just didn't like any of it . And I was | |
06:25 | like , It's not turning out good . And I | |
06:26 | think I was putting a lot of pressure on myself | |
06:27 | because it was a rewrite . And so I felt | |
06:30 | like it had to be amazing , you know , | |
06:31 | like you had your trial run where you messed it | |
06:33 | up . Now you should make it great . So | |
06:36 | I think that that was really messing with me a | |
06:38 | little . And so I really didn't touch the book | |
06:40 | much . Um , when I would write it , | |
06:42 | it would be like a beak would work on it | |
06:43 | , and I'd write 10,000 words and then I wouldn't | |
06:45 | touch it for months around . Oh , I don't | |
06:46 | know what this was late March or April . Honestly | |
06:49 | , I couldn't tell you . Maybe it was even | |
06:50 | early May . I have no idea . When this | |
06:52 | was I just had this sudden burst of inspiration to | |
06:54 | work on the book when I hadn't touched in a | |
06:56 | really long time . And suddenly I was like , | |
06:57 | I really want to write Someone will save you the | |
07:00 | way that I solved my problem where I had been | |
07:02 | like in the book and I had so many dumb | |
07:04 | reasons why I tried to justify why it was difficult | |
07:07 | . I was like , Oh , I'm not liking | |
07:08 | it cause it's young adult and I don't want to | |
07:09 | write young adult enjoying because it's a rewrite and like | |
07:12 | , you know , it's not as fun . I'm | |
07:13 | not enjoying it as much because of this or this | |
07:15 | or this . And then I was like , You | |
07:16 | know what ? I don't know why I'm not enjoying | |
07:17 | it . It's probably a combination of a bunch of | |
07:19 | things , but what if I just decided to like | |
07:21 | it ? So I just made the conscious choice to | |
07:23 | enjoy the book and enjoy writing the book again , | |
07:26 | and I loved it . First day back to writing | |
07:28 | . I wrote 5000 over 5000 words in one day | |
07:30 | , which is unheard of for me . Like for | |
07:31 | other writers that might be normal . Or that might | |
07:33 | happen every so often . I don't write five k | |
07:36 | words in a day that's happened to me one other | |
07:38 | time in my life , and that was like in | |
07:39 | high school . I enjoyed it so much , and | |
07:41 | I was like , Oh , this is what it's | |
07:42 | like to love writing this book . I remember now | |
07:45 | and it was just so nice . Like , I | |
07:46 | think it's something that I'll remember next time . I'm | |
07:49 | not enjoying a project that I know I love . | |
07:51 | I'll just go like , Hey , you can just | |
07:53 | consciously decide right now to enjoy this . You don't | |
07:56 | have to just sit around like hating it , for | |
07:58 | whatever reason , just decide to love it like it's | |
08:00 | your art . To be honest , I haven't written | |
08:02 | since then . That was quite a while ago , | |
08:04 | because I've been so busy and I have been doing | |
08:06 | so many other things kind of decided that after part | |
08:08 | one of honey vinegar , I was going to do | |
08:10 | my edits and I was going to finish , someone | |
08:11 | will save you . I estimate that I have around | |
08:13 | 30,000 words left . If someone will save you . | |
08:15 | I think I'm about 50 kn . I would really | |
08:17 | like to write the rest of it just straight through | |
08:21 | because I've been reading it in these little spurts . | |
08:23 | It's been a side project , and now that I've | |
08:25 | kind of like re found a love for the book | |
08:27 | , I kind of was like , You know what | |
08:28 | ? I want to actually immerse myself in it . | |
08:30 | You know ? You only get to draft the book | |
08:32 | . Well , it's gonna take . You only get | |
08:33 | to draft a book once , but this is actually | |
08:34 | my second time drafting the book , but I doubt | |
08:36 | I will do a full draft of this book again | |
08:38 | . It'll probably just get at it . Drafting is | |
08:40 | my favorite part of the process , so I want | |
08:42 | to actually really immerse myself in it and just really | |
08:44 | get into it . That'll probably happen in the fall | |
08:46 | . Whenever I've done my honey vinaigrette , it's the | |
08:48 | first draft will be done , and then that can | |
08:50 | just be kind of like something off my plate . | |
08:51 | And I won't be trying to draft two books at | |
08:53 | a time . Gonna just give someone will save you | |
08:55 | It's time and I think that that would be really | |
08:58 | nice . So that's basically all my stuff for novels | |
09:02 | . I guess this is kind of a new thing | |
09:04 | , and I'm going to make a full separate video | |
09:05 | of this . I've actually been writing a lot of | |
09:07 | poetry lately . I in May decided , like , | |
09:11 | Okay , I really want to learn how to write | |
09:12 | poetry . And that was something I've been wanting to | |
09:14 | do for a long time . And the reason I | |
09:17 | hadn't done it is was just because I thought I | |
09:18 | was bad at poetry , but I literally not tried | |
09:21 | it . I could say that I was bad at | |
09:22 | poetry , just like I could say that I'm bad | |
09:24 | at juggling or speaking Japanese . I've never done any | |
09:27 | of those things or made an effort to learn . | |
09:29 | Actually , I used to know how to juggle . | |
09:31 | That's a lot . Currently , I don't know how | |
09:33 | to do either of those things so obviously don't know | |
09:35 | how to do them , but like everything is a | |
09:37 | learned skill . So I was just kind of like | |
09:40 | I'm bad at poetry and bad at it , so | |
09:42 | I was like okay , I want to try to | |
09:44 | learn poetry . I don't necessarily think I'll ever be | |
09:46 | amazing at it , but I feel like I would | |
09:49 | enjoy writing it . And so I'm going to try | |
09:51 | . And so I set myself a goal of writing | |
09:53 | 10 poems over the summer . I write 10 poems | |
09:56 | , and by the end of 10 poems , I | |
09:57 | feel like I have learned nothing . Maybe that's a | |
09:59 | sign that poetry is not for me , and I'm | |
10:00 | not gonna I have a feeling that by the end | |
10:02 | of 10 poems , I will feel like I've learned | |
10:05 | something . You know , it's hard to write 10 | |
10:07 | of a thing and not be better at it . | |
10:08 | Like if I think about my first short story compared | |
10:11 | to my 10th short story night and day , I | |
10:13 | was a dum dum who didn't know what I was | |
10:14 | doing on the first short story about the 10th short | |
10:15 | story . Like I was getting things published , I | |
10:17 | was like , I need to just make an effort | |
10:19 | . I don't I'm not saying that by the 10th | |
10:21 | Poma would be publishable because no , but I feel | |
10:24 | like learning make an effort to learn instead of just | |
10:26 | resigning to the fact that you're bad at something that | |
10:28 | you've never done before . So I've written nine poems | |
10:31 | out of my 10 , and I do have an | |
10:33 | idea for the 10th one . I just sit and | |
10:35 | write it . I'll probably do that this week . | |
10:37 | I mean , I am close to my deadline because | |
10:39 | it is like August 20th , so time to take | |
10:41 | in . And then finally , let's chat short stories | |
10:43 | . So I actually have four short stories that I | |
10:45 | view the written or or am in the process of | |
10:48 | writing that I can talk about since my last update | |
10:51 | . So the first story that I wrote is called | |
10:53 | . She always kills the animals . You might know | |
10:56 | this one because I have a vlog of me writing | |
10:57 | in it , which I will leave that in the | |
10:59 | cards . So I wrote that story at the end | |
11:01 | of May . Honestly , it was the best , | |
11:03 | because I was feeling like I hadn't really made a | |
11:06 | lot of progress because at the point with my novel | |
11:09 | with honey vinegar , I mean and also want to | |
11:11 | be with someone will be with both my novels where | |
11:13 | I'm like dead in the middle . You know you | |
11:16 | can't see light at either end of the tunnel . | |
11:18 | I'm deep enough in that . It feels like I've | |
11:19 | been writing it for so long . But I'm far | |
11:22 | enough from the end that the end is not in | |
11:24 | sight . I was kind of feeling like I wasn't | |
11:26 | making any progress whatsoever even though I was making progress | |
11:29 | . It just didn't feel like anything like I could | |
11:30 | write 10,000 words in my novel and be like No | |
11:32 | progress has been made because all I did was getting | |
11:34 | deeper into the tunnel . But I just wrote a | |
11:36 | story in , like , two days I felt on | |
11:39 | top of the world . I was talking about this | |
11:40 | with friends last night , and we were talking about | |
11:42 | , like , finishing story than had been a while | |
11:44 | since we finished the story . And I was like | |
11:46 | , Oh , my God , like the last time | |
11:47 | I finished the story , I was like , This | |
11:48 | must be what cocaine feels like . I was like | |
11:51 | I can do literally anything right now . I finished | |
11:53 | the story , so that was great . So she | |
11:56 | always kills the animals is a pretty short piece . | |
11:59 | It's only 2200 words , which I've really been enjoying | |
12:02 | slightly shorter fiction lately . um for a while , | |
12:05 | everything I wrote was like 4 to 6000 words , | |
12:08 | But I've been playing more around in 2000 to 3500 | |
12:12 | range , which has been really great . I feel | |
12:13 | like it's just me learning to be more concise . | |
12:17 | So this story is bizarro . But what's new had | |
12:20 | had this image in my mind of these two characters | |
12:23 | standing in a koi pond while in like a backyard | |
12:27 | koi pond while there was a party happening in the | |
12:29 | house and it was like a fancy . He was | |
12:31 | like it was like a rich person . I had | |
12:32 | a very , very clear image of this . It | |
12:34 | was nighttime , and this is how most of my | |
12:36 | stories start like I get an image and I'm like | |
12:39 | , Oh , intriguing . So I had this image | |
12:41 | in mind of a while of this koi pond and | |
12:43 | these two people standing in it . I had a | |
12:45 | pretty I could see both of them pretty clearly . | |
12:47 | Um , I was pretty sure they were a couple | |
12:50 | , and then I was also pretty sure that they | |
12:52 | were probably house guest at this party and I have | |
12:54 | in mind for a while , and I kind of | |
12:55 | like this is probably going to turn into a story | |
12:57 | at some point , but I'm just not sure exactly | |
12:59 | what that will be . And then everything started to | |
13:01 | kind of just click , as usually happens for you | |
13:04 | in writing a short story , whatever weird image turns | |
13:06 | into a story starts to click , and I started | |
13:09 | writing it , so this story was really inspired by | |
13:11 | mouth full birds by Spanish wobbling . The idea is | |
13:14 | actually somewhat similar to one of the ideas in this | |
13:18 | collection , but I had the idea beforehand seeing a | |
13:20 | similar idea play out in this story kind of made | |
13:24 | me realize what kind of tone I wanted that idea | |
13:26 | to have . There's a story in this collection about | |
13:30 | father and his daughter eats birds alive . It's the | |
13:33 | title story . It's a great story by weird koi | |
13:35 | Pond idea . Like I had had this idea of | |
13:38 | the girl . The girl like , eats animals alive | |
13:41 | . I've been playing with that for a while , | |
13:43 | and then when I encountered a similar story in here | |
13:44 | , I was like , Oh , I think that | |
13:46 | that's the tone that I want to have . So | |
13:48 | when I started drafting and I wanted it to have | |
13:50 | this eerie , tense dark field . But then when | |
13:53 | I started writing it , it felt like almost like | |
13:56 | the story was mocking itself like vaguely satirical . And | |
13:59 | I was like , No , come back . This | |
14:00 | isn't the time I wanted . And then , as | |
14:01 | I wrote it more , I felt like the sarcasm | |
14:03 | merged well with the darkness . And I'm actually really | |
14:06 | happy with how the story turned out . Like I | |
14:08 | say , that this story is the opposite of my | |
14:10 | personal energy . It's only like 2200 words , so | |
14:13 | it's hard for me to say too much . But | |
14:15 | what I was doing it . It's basically about this | |
14:17 | young man and his girlfriend there , like in their | |
14:19 | early twenties , their co workers , they've been having | |
14:22 | like a summer fling and right after they break up | |
14:25 | and then as kind of the last kick at the | |
14:27 | can , they go break into a stranger's backyard while | |
14:30 | those people are having a party to go swim in | |
14:32 | the pond . And while they're they're the main character | |
14:34 | is just kind of reflecting on his relationship with this | |
14:37 | girl . Her name's Lolly . I wanted her to | |
14:38 | have kind of like a manic pixie dream girl name | |
14:41 | . He's kind of like reflecting on why he's attracted | |
14:44 | to her . A friend of mine calls it the | |
14:46 | whoops . That's my kink story , which I find | |
14:49 | hilarious . Thing I was really happy with this story | |
14:52 | is that I felt like the crux of the story | |
14:54 | came to me quite clearly , and I was like | |
14:56 | , Oh , this is what the story is about | |
14:58 | Psychologically , this is what the main character is wrestling | |
15:01 | with . Psychologically , this is something that can take | |
15:03 | me like a year to figure out . Like my | |
15:04 | story wishbone literally a couple weeks ago . I've been | |
15:07 | writing this story for a year or working on a | |
15:10 | year . I wrote it a year ago , and | |
15:11 | I was like , Oh , that's the crux of | |
15:13 | the story , right ? So she always kills the | |
15:14 | animals . I felt like the crux of the story | |
15:16 | was just very present and clear , and I liked | |
15:18 | how focused , Um , I felt like the story | |
15:21 | has very narrow focus , which was quite happy with | |
15:23 | , and then after that , I wrote a story | |
15:24 | that I was less happy with . Next story that | |
15:26 | I wrote is the last story that I finished . | |
15:28 | I think I wrote this in June , and I | |
15:30 | also have a vlog of me writing this or partially | |
15:32 | writing this . It's called a word that rhymes with | |
15:35 | fishhook . So I wrote this story because I was | |
15:37 | in a class summer class on post apocalyptic film , | |
15:41 | and the professor let you propose a creative project in | |
15:46 | instead of doing the final essay . And I was | |
15:48 | like , I don't feel like writing an essay right | |
15:50 | now . So I asked if I could do a | |
15:51 | screenplay and he's super chill and he was like , | |
15:53 | Yeah , obviously , like it's an apocalyptic film class | |
15:55 | So the script had to be apocalyptic . So I | |
15:58 | wrote my script about a robot apocalypse , and it | |
16:00 | was kind of like from the point of view of | |
16:02 | the robot , I mean as much as a screenplay | |
16:04 | can be from a point of view , the thing | |
16:05 | about me is like I get very attached to projects | |
16:09 | very easily . It takes , like , two pages | |
16:11 | of writing something for me to be like . I | |
16:13 | would die for this character . And so I got | |
16:15 | really easily attached to this idea , and I was | |
16:17 | kind of like , I'm so bad at screen writing | |
16:19 | . I'm attached to this , though , so I | |
16:20 | should write it as a short story . So I | |
16:22 | tried reading as a short story , and honestly , | |
16:25 | I'm just not happy with how it turned out . | |
16:27 | It's way more genre than any of my other stories | |
16:30 | . My other stories have been all like lipstick . | |
16:32 | This one is more genre , and I don't even | |
16:34 | think I've ever like . Okay , I have read | |
16:36 | , but very few genre fiction , short stories . | |
16:39 | So I barely know . How do people do that | |
16:41 | much World building , like , How are they going | |
16:43 | to be structured like my whole education ? And my | |
16:45 | whole background is with a literary style short story , | |
16:47 | and that's how I know how to write short stories | |
16:49 | . So I got to the point in the story | |
16:51 | where , like , the world was ending and there | |
16:52 | was all this action and I was like , Oh | |
16:54 | , my God , I just remembered that I'm terrible | |
16:55 | at writing action . I really wasn't that pleased with | |
16:58 | how it turned out . Unfortunately , it might be | |
17:01 | something I come back to later tinker with , but | |
17:03 | for the moment I'm like , Okay , I got | |
17:05 | that out of my system . I was writing as | |
17:07 | a screenplay because I had to for school and then | |
17:09 | , while writing the screenplay was like , Oh , | |
17:10 | but wouldn't it be better as a short story ? | |
17:11 | And then I wrote as a short story , and | |
17:12 | I was like , Nope , it really was better | |
17:14 | as a screenplay , it was meant to be a | |
17:15 | screenplay . I'm just bad at screen writing , so | |
17:18 | I really didn't execute the vision that I have two | |
17:21 | stories that I'm in the process of writing . I | |
17:23 | probably will touch on them just pretty briefly and save | |
17:26 | them for my next update when hopefully they're done . | |
17:28 | So the first one does not have a title yet | |
17:31 | . I'm still playing around with titles . I got | |
17:33 | both of these ideas for these stories on the same | |
17:36 | day , and so I kind of started them at | |
17:38 | the same time , and that was when I was | |
17:41 | away from home . And so I really haven't really | |
17:43 | had much time to write because I've been on , | |
17:45 | like , a camping trip and at a family reunion | |
17:47 | , and obviously I didn't have time to write . | |
17:48 | Well , I didn't have a way to write when | |
17:50 | I was on an island that I had connected to | |
17:52 | , and I also really didn't have time to write | |
17:54 | when I was at a family reunion surrounded by my | |
17:56 | entire extended family of like almost 30 people For the | |
17:59 | past week and a half , These two stories have | |
18:01 | just been kind of sitting in my head brewing , | |
18:03 | so the first one doesn't really have a title . | |
18:05 | Like I said , I think the title will probably | |
18:07 | come to me as I'm writing . Hopefully , this | |
18:09 | doesn't turn into a story that's really difficult to title | |
18:12 | . Hey , that this story is a classic sailing | |
18:14 | story because it is about birds . My current working | |
18:18 | title , which I don't think I'm going to keep | |
18:20 | keep , is how music falls from the sky . | |
18:22 | I don't know . It just seems like too much | |
18:24 | of a title of like a Y romance . The | |
18:26 | story is about this woman who used to be a | |
18:28 | concert pianist . But then she got in an accident | |
18:31 | , Um , where she lost three of her fingers | |
18:33 | and so she can't play piano anymore . Now she's | |
18:35 | quite like reclusive . We're following her in like , | |
18:37 | two timelines . So in the first time line , | |
18:40 | where she is in the present , where she's kind | |
18:42 | of obsessed with this crow that keeps coming to her | |
18:44 | clothes on and then in the past we see her | |
18:47 | relationship with this other pianists that she knew that she | |
18:51 | was like , um , training with practicing with . | |
18:55 | I used to play piano , and I don't even | |
18:56 | know what the term is . So I think I | |
18:58 | found like a good heart to the story . I've | |
19:00 | just been struggling to structure it , but I think | |
19:02 | I just have to figure out that as I write | |
19:04 | it , the other story that I'm writing , I | |
19:05 | started at the same time and it's okay , So | |
19:07 | when I started this story , I was like , | |
19:09 | This is kind of dumb . It's a dumb story | |
19:12 | and I know that it's dumb and I wasn't really | |
19:16 | intending to ever write it seriously . I thought I | |
19:18 | kind of was like , I'm just gonna write this | |
19:19 | for myself because I have the idea And it was | |
19:21 | a bit more like darkly comic or satirical . When | |
19:24 | that's not only my style , my stories are pretty | |
19:26 | serious . I'm not funny enough to write comic fiction | |
19:30 | . I really was like I'm just gonna write this | |
19:31 | for myself . It doesn't really fit my collection that | |
19:33 | well because it's just kind of comic , and the | |
19:34 | story is called . I apologize in advance for the | |
19:37 | title . It's called the subtle , the key difference | |
19:39 | between shoe gaze and dream pop . And it's about | |
19:42 | this girl One summer she's working as a roadie and | |
19:45 | this really chaotic relationship that she has with this fellow | |
19:49 | Rohde and she's been quite self destructive . And initially | |
19:52 | , I kind of like I said I was seeing | |
19:54 | this kind of comically , and as a result , | |
19:57 | I think I wasn't really giving the character as much | |
19:59 | depth . Like the main character , I hadn't really | |
20:01 | explored any back story for her . I felt like | |
20:03 | I understood her personality , but I don't really understand | |
20:05 | export a backstory for her . And so I think | |
20:07 | as a result , I wasn't humanizing her enough . | |
20:10 | It's kinda hard to explain , but while I was | |
20:12 | writing it , I was like , This is a | |
20:12 | comic story But it felt like there was something sad | |
20:15 | to it , you know , like I could feel | |
20:16 | kind of a sadness there because I could . I | |
20:19 | felt like the character was really self destructive Halfway through | |
20:21 | the story . I go away on this camping trip | |
20:23 | and I don't avoid it , right . And so | |
20:24 | the story is just sitting in my head , and | |
20:25 | while I was away , I got this idea for | |
20:27 | like a very random , small character detail since she | |
20:30 | was fairly young , maybe a teenager , to go | |
20:32 | into clothing stores and , you know , like on | |
20:35 | button up shirts on the inside There's the extra button | |
20:37 | . She would cut off the extra button and just | |
20:39 | steal the extra button . And then I thought maybe | |
20:41 | as she got older , this would extend to her | |
20:43 | stealing it from other people . You know , like | |
20:47 | she's at a party . She steals a button from | |
20:49 | a shirt in the closet or , you know , | |
20:51 | stealing this button from partners or something . I know | |
20:54 | it's so small and it seems kind of random . | |
20:56 | But for some reason I was like , I felt | |
20:58 | a lot of feeling attached to that , and I | |
21:00 | was like , Oh , this is a person whose | |
21:01 | she's just trying to hold on to other people or | |
21:04 | even strangers by just collecting a single button from them | |
21:08 | . It's just like this incredibly false way of having | |
21:11 | a piece of another person kind of realized that the | |
21:13 | story was not just a comic laugh at really pretentious | |
21:17 | music , people being pretentious about music , which is | |
21:19 | what the title comes from . That sounds like the | |
21:21 | kind of thing that a pretentious music person would say | |
21:23 | , which all the characters in the story are . | |
21:25 | And I realized that really is a story about a | |
21:27 | young woman who's trying so hard to connect with other | |
21:29 | people but can't . And she's just hurting herself in | |
21:33 | the process . And I was like , Oh , | |
21:35 | that's actually sad long tangent But that's basically the story | |
21:38 | of how I started writing the story and I was | |
21:40 | like , Well , stupid comic story . And then | |
21:43 | I realized that actually , maybe it was quite a | |
21:45 | serious story , long tangent . But that was kind | |
21:48 | of just like a weird realization that had I thought | |
21:49 | it was kind of an interesting story about how the | |
21:51 | story really evolved . Anyways , that's basically it for | |
21:54 | this update . I don't think I have anything else | |
21:55 | more to say . I think that's basically everything I've | |
21:57 | written . Thank you guys so much for watching . | |
22:00 | Let me know what you've been writing recently . I | |
22:02 | love to hear you guys as little updates . Thank | |
22:03 | you so much for watching . And if you have | |
22:05 | any questions , you can always let me ask on | |
22:06 | public . Thanks . Yeah . Uh huh . |
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Summer writing help for students! Keeping a journal is a good idea for any writer for two reasons. The first being that it is excellent practice for writing, getting used to the habit of writing daily is important to keep your "exercise regime" up.
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